The Days And Life Of Kagami Yoshida

There's a lot of things to work on... Drawing sketches first is the best for making comics, and also using multiple layers for color, lineart, etc.
Also look up some references for anatomy and points of view, every character looks pretty wonky. And maybe try to upload the panels in better resolution.

the heck the thumbnail looks like  kagura from FAIRY TAIL and all of the character is girl

Yikes...

what? this is complete and utter trash just stop.

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